The prompt for Day 5 confused me for a while and I found the poem the hardest I have had to write, mainly because I was trying to write my poem and make the other poem fit the end words, as opposed to looking at the poem and seeking inspiration from the words. Something I tried the second time.
On April 5, 2014
Welcome back, all, for Day Five of NaPoWriMo!
Today’s prompt is a little complicated, which is why I saved it for a Saturday, in the hopes that you might have a little more time today than during a weekday. I think this is a very rewarding form, though, so I hope you’ll enjoy it! Today I challenge you to write a “golden shovel.” This form was invented by Terrance Hayes in his poem, The Golden Shovel. The last word of each line of Hayes’ poem is a word from Gwendolyn Brooks’ poem We Real Cool. You can read Brooks’ poem by reading the last word of each line of Hayes’ poem! (In fact, you can do so twice, because Hayes, being ultra-ambitious, wrote a two-part golden shovel, repeating Brooks’ poem). Now, the golden shovel is a tricky form, but you can help keep it manageable by picking a short poem to shovel-ize. And there’s no need to double-up the poem you pick, like Hayes did.
And here is the poem I chose:
On the fruit stand.
We eat the smile
And spit out the teeth.
I like both versions and as a special treat for you I am going to post both on here for now, I was struggling to choose an extract to share.
The Air is Black
We stand in the garden and talk about watermelons.
Planting seeds in green
trays, sitting like Buddhas
huddled up against the rain in garden chairs, music on
the ipod playing the
tracks we usually listen to on a Friday night, and still we talk fruit,
move inside the shed, we
look up, rain can eat the smile
right out of the sky, town covered in smog and
my disappointment of the grey sheen out
at the sky from the
shed door – seed packet held between my teeth.
I hide the cake behind a slice of Watermelon,
bowl looks a healthy on one side. I carry the desert past the green buddhas
garden path, fruit
leading the way. I stand
and smile, remember how we
used to dance nights like this away. I eat.
I think of the
memories and smile.
Biting cold mouthfuls and
swallowing the pips I should spit out, the teeth
of the melon stuck in mine.