This is my LATE entry for Kellie’s FWF – Free Write Friday Challenge, as it was my birthday weekend. I have found this image several times earlier this week whilst searching for artwork and images to use in the Inkspill portfolio.
He liked to watch the world from here,
Street level.
He wore dark glasses
So no-one could see his thoughts
or tears.
So much had changed.
This place moved on,
even when
people didn’t.
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Glad to see it, I always enjoy your thoughts and comments. Late, time, as with John, is relative….
🙂
Thanks. I know John would go with the flow. Good to see you back online with the FWF.
Woot! You made it! Awesome! And worth the wait. You are brilliant with brevity. 🙂
Thanks Kellie – so glad I made it! Funny how I saw this photograph 3 or 4 times yesterday!
I have read lots of FWF today but have other bits online to catch up with before bed – I will try to read the rest before the next FWF.
Thanks for your lovely comments. As for brevity – that’s where it ended.
Yes I agree with Kellie. You paint such an evocative picture with so few words. The last three lines are terrific. It sums up so many country towns.
Thanks Suzanne – the photograph of John speaks volumes to me, some of that story was bound to seep into the poem.
A brilliant approach to the prompt. Here is my fav: “He wore dark glasses||So no-one could see his thoughts|| or tears.” I think that’s the reason I put on glasses at times.
Thanks for the comments, glad you liked the poem. I think (other than the sunshine) this is why people wear sunglasses! (to hide)
I am wondering if it isn’t John that is not moving on. Or is it his fate to be the observer of life in his small town. Hmm. The brevity speaks volumes!
John moves on in his mind everyday.
He observes life and witnesses the changes. No one sees him.
I think that was the initial essence of the ideas. But as with all poetry – you can read your own story 🙂
People will try and hang on to what is familiar, even if the world around them changes. You express that wonderfully with John. Sorry I haven’t been back to follow up on comments!
It is no problem that you have been away from replies – I have been offline for 5 days – feels like 5 months!
Thanks for the comment – John is certainly trapped in something.
Being offline is nice sometimes — taking a rest or being selective of how much and what you do!
Nice to “hear” from you!
Sometimes moving on is the hardest part.
True.
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