Jun21

Friday Fictioneers – The Guard

Posted on June 21, 2013 by Nina Lewis

I have managed to get online this morning for a quick catch up in Blogland before the rest of the weekend (which I will spend packing boxes!)

This is my entry for Friday Fictioneers this week.

“How funny, in a modern world we cling onto traditions.” laughed Julia.

“I think it’s nice that loads of countries still dress their guards in uniform.”

“Katherine! You and uniforms!”

“Come on let’s see if we can make him smile!” giggled Katherine.

“Kat, he’s got a gun!” Julia retorted.

“Are you sure? I think he’s pleased to see us!”

Julia loved travelling with Katherine. To think one month ago she was about to give Paul his world wide travel dream. This experience made the split bearable. She couldn’t wait to see Kat’s face when they got closer to the guard!

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Hannah on June 21, 2013 at 9:20 am said:

Pity we won’t see it either. Nice one!
And Stockholm is a great place to travel with friends!

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- neenslewy on June 21, 2013 at 9:31 am said:
  
  Thanks Hannah, I will have to add Stockholm to my travel list!
  
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  - Björn Rudberg (brudberg) on June 25, 2013 at 8:59 am said:
    
    Do so.. but use the summer 🙂 Right now we have beautiful weather..
rochellewisoff on June 21, 2013 at 9:28 am said:

Dear Neens,

I’m guessing the guard is Paul? “Happy to see us”. LOL.

Shalom,

Rochelle

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- neenslewy on June 21, 2013 at 9:33 am said:
  
  Now there’s a brilliant twist idea – my mind is not as fast as yours – I was thinking that she might be shocked to see it was a female guard after all the uniform jokes… but I like yours better….
  Ahem… – Of course Rochelle, you guessed it! 😉
  
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julespaige on June 21, 2013 at 3:32 pm said:

Oh, I thought the same as Rochelle…She split with her guy because she didn’t want to be a soilders’ wife…or that he was just ummm…a stuffed shirt without a spine? So many possiblities as to the split. Maybe she didn’t want to be the one ironing the uniforms!

But those poor guards – I’ve always wondered how long their shifts were.

Nicely done.

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- neenslewy on June 23, 2013 at 11:42 am said:
  
  Thanks Jules, lots of great ideas that would all work for the reader and the characters.
  
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thesupercargo on June 21, 2013 at 3:46 pm said:

I was wondering about Paul – Rochelle’s solution makes sense of including him. Liked Kat’s adaptation of ‘gun/pleased to see us’.

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- neenslewy on June 23, 2013 at 11:44 am said:
  
  Thanks, it does make sense. I actually changed the ending once I realised it was a woman. But still even when it was a man, it hadn’t been Paul and I think it might be. Missed a trick there… Glad you saw it.
  
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lingeringvisions on June 21, 2013 at 11:00 pm said:

Lovely!

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- neenslewy on June 23, 2013 at 11:41 am said:
  
  Thanks, glad you liked it.
  
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Kent on June 22, 2013 at 12:43 am said:

Ah-HA! Some story in there, I detect! Yes! Very good! Thanks for writing it!

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- neenslewy on June 22, 2013 at 8:01 am said:
  
  Thanks for the read and comment. There is quite a lot going on for a short flash!
  
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Sandra on June 23, 2013 at 9:44 am said:

🙂 The old jokes are the best! Nice piece.

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- neenslewy on June 23, 2013 at 11:37 am said:
  
  Thanks Sandra. I thought they’d amuse some of the FF readers!
  
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Shreyank on June 23, 2013 at 12:37 pm said:

nice one 🙂

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- neenslewy on June 23, 2013 at 7:56 pm said:
  
  Thanks
  
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Dee on June 23, 2013 at 5:41 pm said:

I liked this, nice work.
Dee

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- neenslewy on June 23, 2013 at 7:52 pm said:
  
  Thanks Dee- happy you enjoyed the read.
  
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Björn Rudberg (brudberg) on June 25, 2013 at 9:00 am said:

Definitely a surprise coming… 🙂

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kz on June 27, 2013 at 9:58 am said:

mmm there really is something about men in uniform.lol ^^ it’s a wonderful thing to have friends that help make breakups easier. enjoyed your story 🙂

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