Picture it & Write- One Hope

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You Need More Than This by *tntrekabulator

 

 

“Anaka, I can’t hold it steady!”

“Here, try this.” struggled Anaka, twisting her free hand into the small of her back and pulling out a shiny Grappler. She threw it as best she could over to Moey, her right side was beginning to feel the tide of stiffness creeping over it too. The grappler skimmed across the floor and landed close enough to Moey’s feet for him to reach down and grab it without upsetting the canister of pills.

‘Attach it, quick!’ Anaka thought.

It wasn’t the easiest manoeuvre and Moey was struggling. Concentrating hard on not dropping the pills, he held the canister downward between his twisted fingers. The Grappler shone like a metallic sneer in his left hand, he tossed it gently into the air to twist it the right way round. It landed in the palm of his hand and like a master chef presenting a dish from the oven, he turned it upside down in one swift movement and let out an incredible cry of pain.

“Aaarrrrrrrrrrrgggggggggghhhhhhhhhhh! AAAAAAAAAAAAhhhhhhhh.”

Ananka panicked she didn’t want anyone to know they were here, Moey was making too much noise.

‘Wimp, you should try childbirth!’ she concentrated her mind on this thought, hoping the joke might take his mind off the pain and back to the situation in hand. It worked this time, Moey turned towards her,

“Shut up and open your mouth as wide as you can.”

Anaka’s face was already beginning to set, her cheeks felt stiff, the pain of opening her lips was almost unbearable, worst than childbirth, she thought. Not daring to make any more noise she tried to focus her mind.

Seeing the struggle behind her still human eyes, Moey leant in as closer.

“Come on! You can do this!” he whispered, “Do it for Lex and the others.” he had to resist all urges to reach out and grab her hand. “Come on!”

Slowly they both heard her face crack and crease as a small hole appeared between her lips. Moey moved his arm and tilted the pill canister until a stream of golden tablets were showering out, slipping quickly into Ananka’s mouth. Some of them were at least.

The canister was empty.

Moey held his breath and waited.

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13 responses »

  1. So much delicious tension, here, darling! I feel like I’m missing something here, but the ambiguity is, I think, part of what’s causing the tension — are these pills good for her? Will they work? I loved it!

  2. Thanks for the comments, I was deliberately ambiguous about the characters/ relationships/ back story etc. But to ease the tension a little I envisaged the pills saving her.
    As for the rest of my ideas I will keep them for now. It might br another project and besides it will be fun to see what other people make of it. 🙂

  3. It was all very vague. I like reading your comment though. That helped form the story. I like to think the pills were saving her too. I’m not sure how going through this pain will help her friends though! Lots of tension. Thanks for contributing this week to Picture it & write, neenslewy! 🙂

    – Ermisenda

    • I was writing a scene of action through dialogue… Maybe that’s why it seems vague to the reader. I have the rest of the story in my head so it is intense to me 😉
      Last night I mapped out the characters and the pre-plot. This prompt has sparked some sort of urban fantasy in my mind. I think it will become a short story. Thanks for he inspiration!

    • Thanks Anne… That was the pain factor I was trying to convey! If it is painful to read then it worked. (Sorry!)
      I am currently working on this story.

    • Thanks Anne… That was the pain factor I was trying to convey! If it is painful to read then it worked. (Sorry!)
      I am currently working on this story.

  4. i really liked the ambiguity as well. love this line ‘Wimp, you should try childbirth!’ lol this kinda terrified me. i think i’ll give birth the old fashioned way, caesarian, while i’m dozing off. ^^

    • I hear you Kz, it terrified me when I wrote it. I was going for the high pain factor. As well as adding a tiny character detail 🙂
      Thanks for the read & comment.

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