Sunday rolls around again and it is with excitement (to write something non-Nano) that I pick up the prompt from ermiliablog. Enjoy!
Oceans cool my body
as I submerge my skin
deeper in,
deeper in.
My eyes stare at clouds
dancing on the edge of
an infinite horizon,
My mind has already travelled home.
In stillness, my body welcomes
the water lapping to and from my being.
I know one day these same waters
Will bring me home to you.
You who may not be waiting
for time
or tide
or man.
Gorgeous! Love it!
Thank you.
Ooo, the ending. I loved how you split the lines up with ‘You who may not be waiting/for time/or tide/or man’. It gave it a slightly eerie edge that I enjoyed. I’m curious as to who ‘you’ is. An interesting piece, Neens! 🙂 Thanks for contributing this week!
– Ermisenda
Thanks … The intention was to slow the reader down. Glad you enjoyed it!
lovely play of words 🙂
Thank you kz
Loved the rhythm; it flowed beautifully &
Delightful ending; it allows for the reader’s interpretation… Love that..! 😉
Thank you that’s what I liked about yours too. I didn’t know what the end would be when I started! 🙂
I really liked the repetition of deeper in at the beginning. It’s like it’s coaxing.
Thanks Anne.
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