Friday again and time to write a Flash – find out what it’s all about by clicking the Friday Fictioneers button.
“I’m soooooo excited! Wait until you see this room,” Kate dragged Marcia across the landing and flung the door open.
“I always wanted one!”
Marcia wasn’t sure how to react, it was amazing, quite unusual in a two bed semi.
“Wow, Kate what does Simon think?”
“He wanted it for his records, but I’ve made him keep them in the boxes in the garage!”
Marcia giggled, Kate always seemed to get her way, she gingerly walked her fingers across the spines of the books. At least some of them were Simons. She wondered if Kate knew about them after all.
Oops. Marcia’s not such a good friend, is she? I enjoyed your story, Neens.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks Rochelle, no Marcia isn’t the nicest of friends, glad you enjoyed the story.
Hmmm, seems like the next scene could be one that changes the story to a murder mystery (or not mystery.) Maybe a bookshelf that must not have been set up quite right could fall on Marcia. With friends like that, who needs enemies?
janet
Thanks Janet, she isn’t such a good friend doing this to Kate after all. I like your idea of a sequel. Especially if Kate knows or suspects already. Plenty of sizzle in this flash to keep writing with – the 2nd one that has turned out to give me more than just 100 words.
oh! grrrrrr >< and that is why i keep only a handful of real friends. lol 🙂 great story with an awesome twist
Most friends wouldn’t do this although some do. Glad you enjoyed the twist.
Well done.
Thanks.
Nice twist at the end! I enjoyed this.
Thanks. Glad you enjoyed it.
Quite brilliant twist takes it from neat story to dynamite!
Loved it.
Thanks, glad you think so. The ending I originally had in mind was not as strong.
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you managed to pack a great little story into 100 words…
Thank you, as with last week’s entry they begin to write themselves, now I am more used to the elements of a flash and from reading others I have seen how to pack them into 100 words. The endings of both the last 2 pieces have been deleted and were changed just before posting. I am glad that this one works. I decided it was a much more fulfilling twist. And reading back I saw that there were some clues set up for the reader too, a happy accident 🙂
I think Marcia is just helping plan for the Anniversery… 😀
What a lovely idea, a twist on the twist! Quite possibly!
This was a good twist, everyone is blaming Marcia for backstabbing her friend, but surely Simon must take some of the blame too. It takes two to tango, as they say!
Absolutely, or even Kate if she hadn’t been so intent on wearing the trousers all the time! Thanks Anne.